I like the way that you have rethought your story. It is often good to write something down and then change your mind. It is interesting that you home into why there is a padlock. I am a bit confused by the ending which seems to contradict the opening(?) but it also makes me intrigued by your story. Well done. I also like the fact that you post your piece in your handwriting. It makes it seem more personal than if it were typed. Do all your classmates do it that way? Keep up the good writing.
ReplyDeleteHello Ben
Mrs H (team 100) in Cheshire here.
I like the way that you have rethought your story. It is often good to write something down and then change your mind.
It is interesting that you home into why there is a padlock.
I am a bit confused by the ending which seems to contradict the opening(?) but it also makes me intrigued by your story.
Well done.
I also like the fact that you post your piece in your handwriting. It makes it seem more personal than if it were typed. Do all your classmates do it that way?
Keep up the good writing.